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The charts below show what UK graduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The charts below show what UK graduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The graphs illustrate the number of
graduate
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 and postgraduate
students
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 in the United Kingdom who did not
work
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 full-time after their graduation in 2008.
Overall
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, its number was much higher for graduates than that for postgraduates.
While
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 both
graduate
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 and postgraduate
students
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 were more likely to continue to study
further
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, the rate of the latter having
part-timetime
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part-time
work
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 was relatively higher than the former. Voluntary
work
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 and unemployment followed similar trends with voluntary
work
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 being the least common for both
students
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. Starting with the graph for
graduate
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students
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, just below 30000
students
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 studied
further
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, which was the most popular path after they left universities.
Secondly
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, the numbers of those with unemployment and part-time
work
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 were similar with the former being slightly higher than the latter with 17735.
In contrast
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,
graduate
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students
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 were less likely to do voluntary
work
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 with only 3500. Turning to the number of postgraduate
students
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,
further
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 studies and part-time
work
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 were almost equally chosen with 2725 and 2535 respectively, which were followed by unemployment with just above 1500.
On the other hand
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, less than 500 postgraduate
students
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 did voluntary
work
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, making it the least dominant.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduate, students, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • statistic
  • unemployed
  • voluntary
  • postgraduate
  • part-time work
  • graduate students
  • full-time work
  • enroll
  • higher education
  • alternative career paths
  • trend
  • not engaged in full-time employment
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