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7. You're working overseas in an international company. You are leaving the country in emergency. Write a letter to your friends explaining the situation. In the letter, you should - apologise for leaving like this - explain what happened - tell them what you're going to miss about working with them

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Dear Freinds, I am leaving the country because of some reasons and I apologise to you I am leaving
this
 country without meeting you. I have an emergency that's why I am going back home. Actually my father very sick for 20 days and yesterday suddenly they got a panic attack and now they are
admitt
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admitted
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 an emergency room in the city hospital and I
recieved
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received
 a call from my brother and he explained me whole situation, so that's why I did not have enough time to say goodbye to all of you and I have one good news is that doctor said that now my dad out of danger and he is good to go back home. Now I really
missed
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 my job and all of you especially our lunch break
apply
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 we
doing
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 fun and shared our lunch boxes
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 our break. Maybe I will come back soon but really I miss you a lot guys. Thank you Your Gursewak Singh
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Ensure to proofread for spelling mistakes (e.g., 'freinds' should be 'friends', 'admitt' should be 'admitted').
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Ensure to cover each point with specific details - perhaps mention a specific moment you enjoyed with friends during lunch.
coherence cohesion
Improve logical structure by organizing the letter into clear paragraphs for each section.
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The tone of the letter is appropriate and friendly, suitable for addressing friends.
coherence cohesion
Greeting and closing are included, maintaining a personal touch.
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You have addressed all parts of the task effectively, explaining the urgency, apology, and what you will miss.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sincere apologies
  • abrupt departure
  • unforeseen circumstances
  • urgent matter
  • unanticipated situation
  • disheartening
  • cherished moments
  • collegial atmosphere
  • professional cooperation
  • stay in touch
  • fond memories
  • future endeavors
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