The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
The bar chart shows information about the percentages of frequency of citizens who eat fast
food
in restaurants over 10 years from 2003 to 2013 in The USA.
Overall
, most
people
had
average
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an average
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time
to consume fast
food
once a
week
and once or twice a month. Meanwhile, less
people
ate junk
food
everyday
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and never.
The
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beginning of the period shown, the most popular
time
to purchase junk
food
was once
in
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a
week
at approximately 32%,
then
once or twice a month at 30%. Followed, several times a
week
and a few times a year were equally
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the same percentage between 14%-16%.
Moreover
, In terms of 2006,
firstly
, the highest spot of frequent
time
in
people
who
attend to
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eat fast
food
in restaurants in the USA is
people
who eat once a
week
which was around 33%.
Next,
the middle position was followed by
people
who
attend
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several times a
week
which was around 20%. Moving to 2013, the
first ranked
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percentage of citizens in The USA who order junk
food
once
in
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a
week
is about 30%, continued with several a
week
and once a month at 16%, and15%, respectively.
Lastly
, the rate of
time
eating fast
food
everyday
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and never had the same pattern in all year with just below 5%
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fast food consumption
  • Frequency
  • Dining trends
  • Demographic factors
  • Peak periods
  • Downward/upward trend
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Nutritional awareness
  • Economic impact
  • Health implications
  • Convenience foods
  • Eating habits
  • Statistical evidence
  • Year-over-year comparison
  • Fluctuation
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