The charts below show the percentages of volunteers by organizations in 2008 and 2014.

The charts below show the percentages of volunteers by organizations in 2008 and 2014.
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The present bar charts compare data about the proportion of people who were volunteers by organizations in 6 different items in 2008 and 2014.
Overall
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, in the first year, the main things that the population applied for were
education
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and Environment
instead
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of Health care.
In addition
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, in the second year, all items except
education
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were the same as the first one, but
education
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altered with sport.
According to
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the 2008 diagram, the main reason for which people wanted to work was
Education
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at 24%;
then
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environment and Art were the most famous with 21, and 18 per cent;
moreover
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, the number of Others was equal to sport at 15%;
however
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, the
last
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thing that people do not like it was health care. The given plot in 2014 demonstrates
education
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could not be at the same level as in 2008 because reduced to the third item by 17% , yet environment and sport climbed by nearly 10%, which got the first and second level.
Also
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, Art and Others like
education
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had a 6 per cent fall;
although
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, the
last
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category was roughly the same as in 2008.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words education with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • proportion
  • volunteer
  • organizations
  • data
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • notable
  • significant
  • compare
  • contrast
  • analyze
  • highlight
  • observe
  • economic
  • societal
  • changes
  • overall
  • key observations
  • notably
  • fluctuate
  • stable
  • marked
  • growth
  • decline
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