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MamadjonovSamandar: The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make make comparisons where relevant

MamadjonovSamandar: The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make make comparisons where relevant
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The provided line chart represents the comparison of the number of
students
 from Indonesia, Hong Kong, Malaysia, and Singapore living in
Australia
 from 1982 to 2000.
Overall
, the amount of overseas
students
 from the four countries shows
significant
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a significant
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 increase throughout the years.
To begin
 with, in 1982, there were only 8.000 Malaysian
students
 living in
Australia
,
this
then
 changed in 1986 with about 3.000
freshmans
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freshmen
freshman
 coming from Indonesia, followed
with
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by
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 9.000 arriving from Hong Kong in 1988.
Additionally
, no Singaporean scholars were found in
Australia
 before 1987,
where
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when
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 around 1.000 of them started staying and more
then
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than
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 becoming residents, reaching almost 20.000 people in the year
of
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apply
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2000. Today, there are more than 80.000
students
 from these four countries spending their time pursuing education in
Australia
, with the highest number of them
are
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apply
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coming from Indonesia.
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