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The diagrams below show the water supply system in Australia present and in future. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the water supply system in Australia present and in future. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagrams depict both the current and projected future
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 supply infrastructure in Australia, as recorded on October 10th, 2015. The overarching objective of the plan is to enhance the management of wastewater and potable
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 through advanced utilization of
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 treatment
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, alongside a redirection of stormwater disposal. Currently, contaminated
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 originating from households, shops, and factories in urban areas is conveyed to filtration
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 purified
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 is directly supplied from storage to designated regions.
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, stormwater from the area is discharged directly into the river, as indicated in the diagrams. Proposed future modifications aim to mitigate issues associated with waterway pollution by redirecting urban stormwater to purification
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instead
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 of releasing it into natural watercourses.
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, reclaimed
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 from the processing
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 will be
channeled
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 back into urban usage for daily activities.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, facilities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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