It has been believed that people reading for pleasure have developed better imagination and language skills than people who prefer to watch TV. Do you agree or disagree?

It has been widely believed that leisure reading is the
fundation
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foundation
of improved imagination and communication efficiency.
However
, speculation has been made on whether the same improvement can be shown
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people with
habit
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of watching TV as well. In my opinion, I agree
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trimph
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triumph
over watching TV because of the rate and the way of presentation of the
information
.
To begin
with, book readers can pause at
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when they stumbled upon
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as the reading process is self-paced.
This
allows the reader to think thoroughly before proceeding to the next chapter.
This
enriches their imagination since they have
time
to digest the materials and create their own version of the story.
However
, the TV shows are usually fast-paced. Little
time
was allowed for the viewers to imagine what is to
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next,
thus
sacrificing the room for creativity on what
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next in the story. Meanwhile, most of the
information
presented in books is based on written words, readers have to imagine the scenery in their head to fully
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immerse
themselves in the books. Books rely heavily on the description of the writers
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the world they create.
Therefore
, the readers can spend
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understanding the words presented and improving their language skills.
On the contrary
, television shows usually have to present visual
information
alongsides
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alongside
auditory
information
, which leaves little
time
for the viewers to comprehend all the
information
and
thus
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jeopardizing
the way for them to learn a
langauge
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language
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Ensure that your introduction clearly sets out the context and presents your stance without ambiguity. Consider rephrasing the introduction to eliminate any potential confusion due to wording.
coherence cohesion
While the essay has a logical structure, improve connections between ideas with more varied transition words and phrases. This will enhance the flow of your argument.
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Elaborate further on examples to clarify points. For instance, mentioning specific types of TV shows or genres of books can strengthen your arguments by providing clear, relatable instances.
task achievement
The essay presents clear and relevant ideas, supporting the argument that reading enhances imagination and language skills more effectively than watching TV.
coherence cohesion
Good use of comparison between the mediums (books and TV) to illustrate differences in how information is processed and understood.
coherence cohesion
Strong concluding sentences in each paragraph that neatly summarize the point made.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • imagination
  • language skills
  • active engagement
  • visualize
  • stimulates
  • sentence structures
  • vocabulary
  • styles of writing
  • grammatical structures
  • cognitive and analytical skills
  • self-paced learning
  • comprehension and retention
  • visual and auditory stimuli
  • attention span
  • informative and entertaining
  • passive
  • demanding
  • interpret and create meaning
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