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MamadjonovSamandar: The graph below shows four countries of residence pf overseas students in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make make comparisons where relevant

MamadjonovSamandar: The graph below shows four countries of residence pf overseas students in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make make comparisons where relevant
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The line graph illustrates the
number
 of
students
 from four countries going overseas to Australia over the 18-year period.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the
number
 of
students
 has increased in eighteen years. At the beginning of the period, Malaysia had the highest
number
 of
students
 going to Australia
accounted
Wrong verb form
accounting
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 for almost six thousand. There
were
Change the verb form
was
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the
Correct article usage
a
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 similar
number
 of Indonesian and Hong
kong
Capitalize word
Kong
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students
which
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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approximately only a thousand
while
 Singapore
students
were
Unnecessary verb
apply
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started around 1987 for going abroad (Australia). Following that, Malaysia was slightly increased and remained the same until 1994. Around 1987, Hong Kong's
students
 surpassed Indonesia and became the second highest
number
. Looking at the figures, Indonesia dramatically increased almost 2 times from around 1994 until 1998 and slightly decreased until the end of the period. Singapore has increased 20 times since the beginning and accounted for around 20.000
students
 in 2000.
Moreover
,
students
 from Hong Kong
also
 increased
which
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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accounted
Wrong verb form
accounting
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 for almost 17.000
students
 and
students
 from Malaysia became the lowest compared to other countries.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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