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You are living in a city in a foreign country, and a friend from your home country is soon coming to visit you for several days. Write an email to your friend. In this letter: Asking him or her to bring some things from home which you are need Saying why you need them Making arrangement to meet

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Dear Nikolai, I am very glad that you will come to visit me in sunny Krasnoyarsk. I remember how we played World of Warcraft in the second year of college. Oh, those sleepless nights, time goes so fast. I hope your character from our team is okay, because we have been disconnected from
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 and now it is impossible for us to pay for the game.
While
 you're packing, I'd like to ask you to take one thing from my garage with you. It's a little blue box with a piece of meteorite in it that I found in school. I told my new wife a lot about it and I'd like to show her. Please call my father, he will open the garage for you and give you
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 because it's not a difficult thing to do. When you arrive, I'll be waiting for you in the front row in the waiting terminal in a tracksuit and shoes, you'll know right away that it's me. I can’t wait to see you
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. All the best, Vlad
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Try providing more specific details on the things you ask your friend to bring, and explaining why they are important to you in a bit more depth. This will enhance the completeness of your response.
coherence cohesion
Although coherence and cohesion were strong, you might consider adding a bit more transitional phrasing to guide the reader through your logical progression of ideas.
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The letter maintains a friendly and suitable tone throughout, which is very appropriate for the situation.
coherence cohesion
You have clearly organized the letter with distinct paragraphs for different ideas, maintaining a logical structure.
coherence cohesion
Your greeting and closing are perfectly fitting for an informal letter to a friend.
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