To many countries, people decide to have a child at a later age. Why is this? Do the advantages of this devlopment outweigh the disadvantages?
I believe that having a
child
at a later age has many advantages, first of all, you'll be able to provide a healthy lifestyle for your child
, and you'll be financially stable, second of all, having a child
is a big responsibility, raising a child
is hard especially if you're young, so when you're a bit old and responsible you can create this
great environment for your kids and you won't have to ask for advices
from other people.
Do the advantages of Change the wording
advice
pieces of advice
bits of advice
this
development outweigh the disadvantages? Yes it does
Yet it may be diffcult
to communicate with your Correct your spelling
difficult
child
when there's a big age gap between you and them, as well being born in different generations, it will effect
the way you understand each other.
From my personal experience, my mother is fifty years old and my father is almost Correct your spelling
affect
sixty five
years old, and they had plenty of time to raise me well, because when you're in your twenties and you decide to have a kid you won't have all your time and attention to raise them, you still have a job and you will be probably working most of your day, but from another perspective, I believe that having a Add a hyphen
sixty-five
child
in your twenties is such
a great idea, you'll be able to understand your kid and communicate better, also
you will be able to bond with them and understand them,
Here in saudi
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Saudi Arabia
arabia
and especially in our culture, many people get married at a young age, and that's Change the capitalization
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the
normal for them, but I don't think Change the article
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i
agree with that idea
I prefer having a kid when I'm financially, and mentally readyChange the capitalization
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