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You recently attended a meeting at a hotel. When you returned home, you found you had left some important papers at the hotel. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter • say where you think you left the papers • explain why they are so important • tell the manager what you want him/her to do

#hotel #home #papers #manager
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to ask for a favour.
On
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 our
recently
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recent
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 meeting at your
hotel
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hotel,
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 I forgot my
bank’s
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bank
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 paper there.I would bring most grateful if you could help
mr
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me
 to find it.let me give you more information in detail.
Certainly
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 I am pretty sure whole waiting time before our meeting , I was
seating
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sitting
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 in the lobby near
elevator
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the elevator
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 on the right side of the green bench.
However
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 for 5
minutes
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minutes,
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 I was talking with my phone and I changed my seat to the window side. It might be I left them on the table beside
flower
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the flower
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 pot. If I
be
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am
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 more honest with you, those related to the
lone
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loan
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 which I applied through my bank at the same time
day
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of day
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,and
its
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apply
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include all of my private
accounts
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account
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 information. Unfortunately, I have had a bad experience
about
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with
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 losing
such
a
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an
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 important document and someone used
them
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it
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. I would
therefore
 ask that you keep them in your secure box . Will send my driver as soon as possible to bring them back. I hope that my request does not cause you any inconvenience. Yours faithfully, Armita
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grammar
Try to avoid small grammatical errors and typos, such as 'bring most grateful' instead of 'be most grateful,' and 'If I be more honest' instead of 'To be more honest.'
coherence cohesion
You should merge sentences that describe related information to avoid fragmented or choppy writing, such as your sentences about sitting near the elevator and near the window.
coherence cohesion
Your paragraphs should develop a single idea more clearly. For example, the importance of the documents and your past experience could be combined.
task achievement
Focus on providing a bit more detail about what you want the manager to do once the documents are found; this will make your request clearer.
suitable writing tone
The letter has a polite and respectful tone, appropriate for the situation.
task achievement
You have very effectively communicated the urgency and importance of the situation.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Dear Sir/Madam,
  • I am writing to inform you that I believe I left some important papers at your hotel.
  • To the best of my recollection, I left the papers in the conference room.
  • These papers are of utmost importance as they contain confidential business information.
  • I kindly request that you or your staff check the conference room and securely send the papers to my address.
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