In many countries, smoking is now illegal in public places. Many people believe that such a ban is justified. Do you agree or disagree?
Smoke is prohibited in public areas in many nations, a law supported by many people as a correct measure to society. From my point of view, smoking should be restricted continuously to aware society of its damage and consequences not just for
smokers
, but for people around them.
Firstly
, the prohibition of smoking in public places such
as parks, hospitals, cafes, and other spaces is a beneficial step because it is proven scientifically that passive smokers
can develop diseases such
as cancer as well as
the smoker. Consequently
, the restriction of unwanted exposure to smoke in public spaces limits this
type of issue because most of the time non-smokers
can not avoid the presence of a smoker and its bad habit
in communal places. For instance
, with the ban on smoking indoors in Brazil, the rate of lung cancer and other lethal diseases among workers in public spaces declined consistently.
Furthermore
, this
ban has the advantage of helping those addicted to cigarettes to quit their habits. Because they are not allowed to use it while
joining with friends or family in common social places, dropping the necessity of this
addiction and inducing them to stop this
bad habit
. For example
, many smokers
report that social pressure to stop the harmful habit
of smoking is one of the main reasons why they want to quit.
To conclude
, I believe that the law of smoking ban in public areas in many nations is justified by the necessity to make smokers
aware of this
harmful habit
and to prevent innocent people from developing serious health conditions caused by passive smoking.Submitted by kahenahoffmann on
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that your introduction sets up the main argument clearly and concisely. The phrase, 'From my point of view, smoking should be restricted continuously to aware society of its damage and consequences not just for smokers, but for people around them,' could be rewritten for clarity. For example: 'In my view, the continuous restriction of smoking in public places is justified to make society aware of its harmful effects not only on smokers but also those around them.'
task achievement
Although examples are relevant, such as the one about Brazil, try to provide more variety or elaborate slightly to add depth to your arguments.
coherence cohesion
The essay is well-structured, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
task achievement
The essay maintains a clear and consistent argument throughout, which enhances the overall clarity and persuasiveness.
task achievement
Good use of an example with Brazil to support the main point about the benefits of smoking restrictions.