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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates four different
transportation
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 of supplies in
million
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tonnes
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 in Britain between 1974 and 2002. An initial analysis reveals that, despite being in different patterns, there was an increase in the amount of goods transported
in
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 all means of transport in the
period
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 analyzed.
Overall
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, the primary
transportation
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 of products throughout the
period
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 was the road. Despite four categories
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 an increase over the whole
period
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, rail exhibited a fluctuation.
Firstly
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,
road
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the road
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 led the modes of
transportation
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 over the
period
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, with approximately 70
million
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tones
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tonnes
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 transported in 1974.
Although
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 experiencing a slight dip around 1982, it increased steadily to 100
million
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tonnes
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 in 2002.
In contrast
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,
pipeline
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pipelines
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 exhibited the least used
transportation
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 of goods, with less than half
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million
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a million
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tonnes
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 in 1974,
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 increasing to just over 20
million
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tonnes
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since
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from
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 1995 to 2002.
On the other hand
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, the number of
tonnes
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 of products transported by water started at just under 40
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, rising to nearly 60
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 from 1978 to 1982 and remaining relatively constant until 1998,
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 reaching
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over that number in 2002.
Conversely
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, rail
transportation
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 exhibited a steady variation, dropping from 40
million
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tonnes
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 in 1974 to about 30
million
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 in 1995, and
then
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 increasing again to over 40
million
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tonnes
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 by 2002.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words transportation, million, tonnes, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Overview
  • Trend
  • Fluctuation
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Stability
  • Mode of transport
  • Quantity
  • Comparison
  • Goods
  • Transported
  • Significant
  • Noticeable
  • General trend
  • Time span
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