The charts show participation in sporting activities at RT college over a 35-year period and the number of cyclists at this college in 1995

The charts show participation in sporting activities at RT college over a 35-year period and the number of cyclists at this college in 1995
The line graph illustrates the proportion of students who took part in jogging, swimming and cycling activities at RT college from 1960 to 1995.
However
, the table shows the number of males and females in cycling in the year 1995 at the same college. It is clearly observed from the line chart that jogging and swimming rose significantly during a period,
while
the percentage of cycling declined marginally.
Also
, at the table, the figure for females in cycling was higher than that of males. In detail, in 1960, the figure for students who participated in jogging was 10%,
whereas
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swimming was higher by a quarter. From
this
year until 1995, these figures increased dramatically by a third and under 30% respectively.
Nevertheless
, the proportion of cycling declined marginally from 50% to 40%. Over the next five years, it grew to over 40%. From 1975 onwards, there was a substantial decrease of about a fifth. With regard to the table, the number of female students in cycling was 380,
whereas
that of males was lower at 230 in the year 1995 at RT college.
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