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You work in an international company. You need to take some time off work. Write a letter to your employer. In your letter:  explain why you need this time off  give details of when you want this time off  say who can do your work when you are away

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Dear sir, Hope you are doing well. I am
writting
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writing
this
 letter regarding take one month rest from the work. I
am
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have been
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 working in your company
last
 four years, and I am a very honest and hard worker
for
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in
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office
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the office
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. My Mother
face
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faces
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 some health
probelms
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problems
. No
anyone
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one
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 in the home
for
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to for
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 care my mom.
i
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I
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 should
to
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apply
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go to
india
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India
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 after five days. Please give me
premmision
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permission
 and
approved
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 my request. I know
this
 time
to
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too
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 much work in office. Every person
have
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busy
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a busy
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sechudle
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schedule
 no one extra worker you have. But Ramesh very good
employer
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employee
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 in your office staff. He
is
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apply
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mange
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managed
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every thing
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everything
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 for a month.
Hopefully
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 you will
accepet
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accept
 my request, Looking forward to hearing from you soon.
Your
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 sincerely, Sunny,
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task achievement
The letter needs proofreading to correct spelling mistakes and grammatical issues (e.g., 'writting' should be 'writing', 'probelms' should be 'problems').
suitable writing tone
Your letter should follow a more formal tone, such as by using 'Dear Sir/Madam' or including the employer's name if known.
task achievement
You have included the essential points: reason for leave, duration, and who will cover your tasks.
coherence cohesion
You've structured your letter into clear paragraphs, making it easier to follow.
greeting and closing
You provided a logical conclusion and a polite closing.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • requesting time off
  • minimal disruption
  • capable colleague
  • cover responsibilities
  • workload management
  • urgent tasks
  • accessible
  • considering your request
  • contribute more effectively
  • appreciate
  • temporary absence
  • proactive planning
  • smooth transition
  • alternative arrangement
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