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The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar diagram displays the number of tourists who went
sight seeing
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sightseeing
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 at the National
gallery
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Gallery
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, Victoria and Albert
Museum
 and British
museum
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Museum
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 from 2007 to 2012.
Overall
 it is immediately apparent that
visitors
 to the National
gallery
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Gallery
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 increased over the period. Looking at the chart,
National
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the National
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gallery
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Gallery
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 which was the least popular amongst the 3 sceneries with about 7
million
visitors
 in 2007 saw a rise in the number of
visitors
 reaching a value of approximately 17
million
 making the place the most visited site in 2012.
Although
Victoria
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the Victoria
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 and Albert
Museum
 had the highest number of tourists in 2007, 2008 and 2009, that
scenary
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scenery
scenario
 was the least patronised in 2012. Turning to
British
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the British
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Museum
, there were fluctuations in the people who went
sight seeing
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sightseeing
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 there. 2007 witnessed about 13
million
visitors
. Over the next 2 years,
this
 figure fell to a little lower than half at around 6
million
.
However
, the next 3 years saw
an
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 rise reaching nearly 15
million
 tourists in 2012.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum, visitors, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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