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The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

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Introduction
The most fundamental goal of
science
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 should be to enhance people’s well-being. I strongly agree with
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 view because
science
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 can elevate the quality of human life and increase financial income, which supports the economic aspect in people’s lives.
Body paragraph 1
The primary reason why I agree with
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 view is that
science
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 can convey the quality level of human life in different dimensions.
This
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 is because the biggest evolution in
research
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 theories supports and improves human health.
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, medical
research
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 is establishing a healthy diet routine which has used in a dietitian clinic for a specific category of people.
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, diabetic patients must follow a diet with a low level of sugar
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 of the
last
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 5 studies published.
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, there is a substantial effect of
science
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 on people’s lives.
Body paragraph 2
Another reason why I agree with
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 statement
science
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 is increasing financial income and growth in economic rewards.
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, profits will grow when one usually works as an author or co-author in a
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science
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scientific
 journal.
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, an author gets 200 dollars for each
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 paper published in a Q1 journal and 150 dollars in a Q4 journal on online websites
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 as PubMed and Google Scholar.
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, economic earnings will grow with
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 directly.
Conclusion
In conclusion, it has been considered an important aim to improve human life.When it is raising the quality of people's lives in various dimension
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 as the medical aspect , and has a direct impact on money acquisitions, which gives human comfortable and luxurious lifestyle through
research
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 disclosure in a global journal.

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task response
Your clear view is that science should improve life. Keep this view clear in every main part. Explain more fully why better health and work money make life better.
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The health point is more useful than the money point. The money example is not very strong because many people do science to help others, and most writers do not get paid for each paper. Use a better point, such as clean water, safer travel, or new ways to grow food.
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Give examples that are easy to believe and explain the link to the question. For example, say how new drugs help people live longer or how farm science can give more food to poor families.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, two main parts, and an end. This is a good plan. Make the first line of the second main part complete: “Another reason why I agree is that science can increase income...”
coherence and cohesion
Use one main idea in each part. In the first main part, stay with health. In the second, stay with one strong way science improves daily life. Then add an example and a short result.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words with care. You use “For example” and “As a result” many times. Use them only when needed, and make sure the result follows from the example.
coherence and cohesion
Make the end shorter and clearer. Repeat your two main reasons in simple words, without new ideas such as a “luxurious lifestyle” or “research disclosure.”
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You answer the question directly and clearly state that you strongly agree.
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You give two reasons and try to support both with examples.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear overall order: opening, two main parts, and a final end.
coherence and cohesion
Words such as “The primary reason,” “Another reason,” and “In conclusion” help the reader follow your ideas.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • technological advancements
  • medical discoveries
  • life-changing inventions
  • innovations
  • solutions to human problems
  • enhancing quality of life
  • improvement of healthcare
  • transportation
  • communication
  • agriculture
  • energy sectors
  • eradication of diseases
  • prolongation of life expectancy
  • global challenges
  • climate change
  • overpopulation
  • food security
  • developed world
  • underprivileged communities
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