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The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart depicts the change proportion of nationalities in
world
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 demographic data in 4 countries
across
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 1950 to 2002 and the expected percentage in 2050.
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, India is the only nation that shows an increase in the percentage of
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world
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the world
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population
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 and is expected to overtake China as the highest proportion in
world
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 demographic data
2050
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in 2050
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.
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 with,
Indian
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India
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 was accountable for less than
two-fifth
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two-fifths
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 of the
population
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 in 1950. It rose to over
two-fifth
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two-fifths
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 in 2002 and is expected to
continously
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continuously
 climb up to nearly one-fifth of the
population
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, which is projected to be the largest nationalities by
then
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.
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, China
has
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suffered a drastic decrease in the
population
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 from
a
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 overwhelmingly nearly 25% of the
world
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population
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 to nearly
two-fifth
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two-fifths
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 in 2002 and is expected to continue the decline to exactly
two-fifith
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two-fifths
 of the
population
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 in 2050.
Same
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 drop is
also
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 observed for USA and Japan, where the American
population
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 dropped from more than 5% to exactly 5% in 2050 and
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the Japnese
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Japnese
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Japanese
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population
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 plummeted from slightly less than 5% to a
unnoticiable
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unnoticeable
 2% roughly in 2050.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words world, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bar chart
  • World population
  • Percentage
  • Projection
  • Demographics
  • Trend
  • Significant change
  • Ranking
  • Shifts
  • Decline
  • Growth
  • Comparative
  • Population distribution
  • Notable
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Population dynamics
  • Data interpretation
  • Summarize
  • Trends over time
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