The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart depicts the change proportion of nationalities in
world
demographic data in 4 countries
across
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1950 to 2002 and the expected percentage in 2050.
Overall
, India is the only nation that shows an increase in the percentage of
world
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population
and is expected to overtake China as the highest proportion in
world
demographic data
2050
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.
To begin
with,
Indian
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India
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was accountable for less than
two-fifth
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two-fifths
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of the
population
in 1950. It rose to over
two-fifth
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two-fifths
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in 2002 and is expected to
continously
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continuously
climb up to nearly one-fifth of the
population
, which is projected to be the largest nationalities by
then
.
Then
, China
has
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suffered a drastic decrease in the
population
from
a
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overwhelmingly nearly 25% of the
world
population
to nearly
two-fifth
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two-fifths
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in 2002 and is expected to continue the decline to exactly
two-fifith
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two-fifths
of the
population
in 2050.
Same
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drop is
also
observed for USA and Japan, where the American
population
dropped from more than 5% to exactly 5% in 2050 and
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the Japnese
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Japnese
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Japanese
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population
plummeted from slightly less than 5% to a
unnoticiable
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unnoticeable
2% roughly in 2050.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words world, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bar chart
  • World population
  • Percentage
  • Projection
  • Demographics
  • Trend
  • Significant change
  • Ranking
  • Shifts
  • Decline
  • Growth
  • Comparative
  • Population distribution
  • Notable
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Population dynamics
  • Data interpretation
  • Summarize
  • Trends over time
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