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Many people today use their phones for sending texts more than talking. What are the reasons for this? are there more advantages than disadvatages ?

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These days, it is
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undeniable that people are addicted to technological advancement. Many people prefer to deliver
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convenient
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the following reasons. There are some advantages of texting than talking by smartphones. One of the major benefits is that
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the introverter to express their feelings. and emotions through texting because they are afraid to talk to someone by Phone ringing
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 to deliver it.
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, not only delivers messages but
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memories
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; there are a plethora of message apps. are provided more
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 than calling. Despite these advantages, there are some drawbacks
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 using text for communication than calling.
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someone
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 of speaking,
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 to talk
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texting in text apps
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namely,
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 and
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. These are the drawbacks of
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it is most suitable for introverters to communicate
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Content
The main points are clearly stated and are relevant to the topic.
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The essay addresses both the reasons for the trend and examines the advantages and disadvantages, thus providing a complete response.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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