The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010
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the construction differences made for
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hospital in 2010
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2007. Both maps
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city
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road
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runs
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along the southern area
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crossed by the hospital
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connected with the ring
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which runs around the
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hospital. But,in 2010, they have created two roundabouts and first one at the junction of the
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and hospital
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and the second one at the hospital
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, they construct a bus station in 2010, at the left side of hospital
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joined to the both roundabouts.
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, the bus stops beside the hospital
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in 2007 ,has been destroyed. In 2007,the car park which was opened to both staff and public at the right side of the hospital
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among the ring
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has been constructed as staff car park and
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, a public car park designed at the eastern area of the
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hospital just bordered the ring
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. In a nutshell, there is clear huge construction viwe than in 2007 and 2010.
Submitted by amalitharangani0Most of villagers are changing their accommodations from villages to cities all around the world. As a result of this countryside residents are lower than town areas.I think this is a negative development and in this essay, I will elaborate my perspectives furthermore. According to this situation, my take on this is, different of the facilities between the town and the village. As an example, there are lots of shopping centres in the city such as house- hold items, clothes, stationeries, vehicles and so on. Conversely, developed educational centres, schools, hospitals with enough facilities are also at the urban areas. Nevertheless, there are lots of companies and unlimited job opportunities in the city area. Also, mostly there are continuous electricity, gas,water and well planned and punctual transport system as well. So people prefer to live in comfortably and moving to cities as they possible. Additionally, villagers and town people's have same basic need. Such as food, accommodation, education, good health and freedom as well. In some countries there is unavailable electricity in the countryside. Also, there is poor transport system, teachers and facilities at village schools. Moreover, sometimes not enough medications and human resources. So countryside people preferred to move to town. Finally, countryside population decreased and urbanisation in cities. In a nutshell, if there is as usual same facilities all over the city and rural areas,as there is lots of freedom in the countryside . My point of view is around the world this point is most prominent in developing countries. on

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words city, road with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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