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The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. K Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. K Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The given two maps illustrate how the village
Ryemouth
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of Ryemouth
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 was changed from 1995 to
current
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the current
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 time
It is clear that
 the forest park and farmland
to
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for
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 golf
tennis
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and tennis
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,
as well as
fishing
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the fishing
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 port
was
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disappeared and
road
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a road
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 was constructed near houses. Looking
to
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at
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 the second picture, shops and fish
market
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markets
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 were changed to
restaurant
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restaurants
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 and some apartments respectively.Another notable thing that
near located
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nearby
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area
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areas
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 of houses and
hotel
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hotels
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 was added some count of houses and were built car parking
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Residential Area: Neighborhoods where people live.
  • Commercial Development: Construction of business-related buildings like shops and offices.
  • Infrastructure: Fundamental facilities like roads, public transport, etc.
  • Recreational Area: Spaces dedicated to sports, parks, and other leisure activities.
  • Connectivity: The state of being connected or interconnected.
  • Natural Landscape: The visible features of an area of land in terms of hills, forests, lakes, etc.
  • Conservation Efforts: Actions taken to preserve and protect the environment.
  • Expansion: The process of becoming larger or more extensive.
  • Amenities: Useful features or facilities of a place.
  • Development: The process of developing or being developed, especially within a mapped area.
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