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The graph shows electricity production (in terawatt hours) in France between 1980 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows electricity production (in terawatt hours) in France between 1980 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph delineates the source of
electricity
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 manufacturing in France from 1980 to 2012.
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, it is apparent that the
electricity
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 production by source in France fluctuated wildly. To be more specific,
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 the data
of
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electricity
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 from nuclear and renewable sources were rising in
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 period, the figures for thermal and hydroelectric production were decreasing over time. Between 1980 and 2012, the
electricity
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 in France mainly came from nuclear plants.
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, nuclear
electricity
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 production tended to grow in
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 period.
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 tendency can be easily seen from the chart that the figures increased dramatically from 50TW-h in 1980 to 400TW-h in 2012. Sharing the same trend, the manufacturing rate of renewable sources of
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 gradually rose up to 25% in 2012 despite staying at 0TW-h
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 20 years.
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, the data
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electricity
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 which
made
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 of thermal and hydroelectric energy tended to decline in
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 period.
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 trend is evident in the chart that from 1980 to 2012, the figures for thermal and hydroelectric decreased from 70TW-h to 50TW-h and from 124TW-h to 45TW-h respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, tw-h with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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