The diagrams below show the life cycle o f a species o f large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The diagrams below show the life cycle o f a species o f large fish called the

salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The diagram below illustrates the life span of
salmon
, a type of large fish found in the ocean. Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is apparent that there are 4 stages in
it
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its
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lifespan consisting
eggs
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of eggs
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, fry, smolt
anf
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and
adult
salmon
.
Besides
, there are different environmental conditions involved for
salmon
to grow optimally.
Initially
, the
salmon
will migrate from
seas
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sea
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to
river
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the river
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and lay
eggs
in
upper
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the upper
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river
where the water current is
slow
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slowly
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moving, making
eggs
not to be disturbed by the moving waters.
Eggs
were laid in the vicinity of stones and reeds and it takes 5-6 months to hatch.
Next,
the hatched baby fish called fry of about 3-8cm
length
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in length
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will swim to the lower
river
where the water is fast flowing and will grow bigger into
smolt
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a smolt
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of about 12-15cm long.
Subsequently
, after 4 years in
thelower
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the lower
river
, the smolts will swim into the open seas and take
of
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apply
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about 5 years to grow into
its
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apply
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adult
salmon
of about 70-76cm long.
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