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TASK1 : The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.

TASK1 : The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.
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The chart illustrates the average daily
hours
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 spent on recreational activities by
tourists
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 from China, America, Turkey and Brazil during their vacation in Greece in August 2019.
Overall
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, reading
books
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 was the most popular leisure activity among all four nationalities,
while
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 visiting places was the least popular. There were significant variations in the time spent on beach activities amongst
tourists
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 from the four countries. Chinese
tourists
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 choosing reading
books
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 as their main leisure
activities
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activity
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 with 8
hours
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 per day was the opposite for visiting places only 1 hour per day.
Similarly
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, the daily
hour
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hours
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reading
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of reading
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books
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 of
tourists
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 from Brazil stood at 4
hours
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, which was twice as much as visiting places for just 2
hours
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.
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, Turkish and American
tourists
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 demonstrated similar patterns,
while
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 reading
books
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 took 4
hours
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 and 5
hours
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 respectively, both groups
spending
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spent
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 3
hours
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on
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apply
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sightseeing. The amount of time that
tourists
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 from distinct countries enjoy their holiday at the beach gradually rises in the sequence of Chinese (3
hours
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), American (4
hours
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), Turkish (5
hours
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), and Brazilian (6
hours
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).
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, tourists, books with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average number
  • leisure activities
  • tourists
  • nationalities
  • cultural trends
  • interests
  • vacation
  • influence
  • participation
  • impact
  • weather
  • events
  • festivals
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