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The line graph shows the percentage of Australia export to four countries from 1992 to 2012.

The line graph shows the percentage of Australia export to four countries from 1992 to 2012.
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The graph indicates the volume of
Australian
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exports
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 in percentage by destination country to
Japan
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, the US,
China
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, and India between 1990 and 2012.
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, the shares of
exports
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 to
Japan
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 and the US declined,
while
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 the shares of
exports
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 to India and
China
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 were on
rising
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 trend. In 1990,
Japan
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 and the US were the major
Australian
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 export destinations, accounting for more than 25% and 10% of the
Australian
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 total
exports
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, respectively.
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,
exports
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 to
Japan
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 sharply dropped to 20% in 1995, from which it continued to decline gradually. Between 1990 and 2012,
Australian
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exports
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 to the US fluctuated, and by 2012, the share of
exports
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 to the US was less than 10%.
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,
exports
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 to
China
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 drastically surged from less than 5% in 1990 to 30% by 2012. During the same period,
exports
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 to India
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 gradually rose,
although
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 it is less drastic compared to
China
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australian, exports, japan, china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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