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The bar chart below gives information on the percentage of british people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The bar chart below gives information on the percentage of british people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The percentage of British people donating
money
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 to charity by age intervals for the years 1990 and 2010 is depicted in the bar chart given.
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,in 1990,the largest proportion of humans ,aged 36-50 gave
money
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 to charity organisations but in 2010,
this
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 was valid for mankind
who
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apply
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aged between 51-65.
On the other hand
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, it is observed that
money
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 donated to folk who are in the 18-25 range was the least in both 1990 and 2010.
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 there was a similar trend,illustrating a substantial incline in the percentage of
community
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the community
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 donating
bill
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bills
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 to benevolent societies from 18 to 50 ages in both years,people who are aged between 51 and 65 and who are older than >65 were on a larger scale to give
money
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 to
endownment
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endowment
endowments
.
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,the largest growth in the percentage of people being helpful to other humans was seen from the 18-25 to 26-35 range in 2010 with about 17%. In spite of a peak reached in humans who are auxiliary to others in 1990,a gradual decline was observed in
65
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the 65
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 age group from over 40% to 30%.
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, a steep escalation was displayed in mankind donating payment to
fund
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funds
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 from 5% to approximately 40%,following a moderate fall back to about 35%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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