The growth of online shopping will one day leasd to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?
It is believed by some people that online shopping is getting popular, and
as a
result
all shops will Add a comma
result,
shutdown
in towns and cities at one point. Correct your spelling
shut down
However
, I firmly disagree with this
statement because many online shopping websites
are not trustworthy. Also
, online shopping is not satisfying to all individuals
.
Many online customers find online shopping a scam site,
because on the internet there are hundreds of Remove the comma
apply
websites
where they can buy clothes, shoes, and accessories. But, the issue is some of those websites
are real and some are fake, unfortunately. It is almost impossible to find out
the right website and do the shopping from there. Change preposition
apply
That is
why, customers get scared by these scam websites
, instead
they prefer going to the store and Add a comma
instead,
buy
the needed item. Wrong verb form
buying
For example
, in Canada, Temu is a shopping website, where people can buy stuff at very cheap prices. I also
did the shopping from that particular website and my credit card information got stolen. But, fortunately
I called my bank and Add a comma
fortunately,
bloced
the card right away.
Correct your spelling
blocked
Moreover
, online shopping cannot fulfill
all needs of customers. When people shop, they consider multiple things before buying Change the spelling
fulfil
such
as fabric, size and quality of the product. Sometimes it gets really hard to check all these things online because customer
cannot feel the fabric by touch . Fix the agreement mistake
customers
Similarly
, sizes differ from brand to brand and its
difficult to find the actual fit to the body. Correct your spelling
it's
Therefore
, individuals
likes
to go Change the verb form
like
the
showrooms and do all the checking and buy the best product that suits them. After considering these points, it is crystal Change preposition
to the
cleathat
online shopping will not shit the shops at any cost.
In conclusion, there is no doubt some Correct your spelling
clear that
individuals
do online shopping in order to save time. Nevertheless
, I believe because
there are Correct word choice
that
a
Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
individuals
too, who cannot trust on
these false Change preposition
apply
websites
for their bank information and as
Correct word choice
apply
this
online shopping does not suits
Correct subject-verb agreement
suit
to
all, from Change preposition
apply
satisfaction
perspective. That's why, online shopping cannot Correct article usage
a satisfaction
effect
the shops in future.Correct your spelling
affect
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