The growth of online shopping will one day leasd to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed by some people that online shopping is getting popular, and

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result

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all shops will

shutdown

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in towns and cities at one point.

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, I firmly disagree with

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statement because many online shopping

websites

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are not trustworthy.

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, online shopping is not satisfying to all

individuals

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. Many online customers find online shopping a scam site

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because on the internet there are hundreds of

websites

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where they can buy clothes, shoes, and accessories. But, the issue is some of those

websites

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are real and some are fake, unfortunately. It is almost impossible to find

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the right website and do the shopping from there.

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why, customers get scared by these scam

websites

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instead

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instead,

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they prefer going to the store and

buy

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the needed item.

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, in Canada, Temu is a shopping website, where people can buy stuff at very cheap prices. I

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did the shopping from that particular website and my credit card information got stolen. But,

fortunately

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I called my bank and

bloced

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blocked

the card right away.

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, online shopping cannot

fulfill

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all needs of customers. When people shop, they consider multiple things before buying

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as fabric, size and quality of the product. Sometimes it gets really hard to check all these things online because

customer

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customers

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cannot feel the fabric by touch .

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, sizes differ from brand to brand and

its

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difficult to find the actual fit to the body.

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individuals

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likes

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to go

the

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to the

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showrooms and do all the checking and buy the best product that suits them. After considering these points, it is crystal

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clear that

online shopping will not shit the shops at any cost. In conclusion, there is no doubt some

individuals

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do online shopping in order to save time.

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, I believe

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there are

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individuals

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too, who cannot trust

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these false

websites

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for their bank information and

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this

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online shopping does not

suits

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suit

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all, from

satisfaction

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a satisfaction

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perspective. That's why, online shopping cannot

effect

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affect

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the shops in future.

Submitted by ksamandeep03 on Wed Jul 10 2024

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grammar

Work on eliminating grammatical errors, such as improper verb forms (e.g. 'shut down' instead of 'shutdown') and incorrect article usage.

structure

Remember to review the basic structure of paragraphs, ensuring each sticks to one main idea and using clear topic sentences.

conclusion

Strengthen your conclusion by restating the key points more clearly and persuasively without introducing any new ideas.

clarity

Your essay has clear main points which directly address the prompt's question on why shops might still exist despite the growth of online shopping.

examples

You provided relevant examples in your body paragraphs, such as the Temu website experience, which support your arguments well.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

338 words

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