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the chart below show the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

the chart below show the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
#show #percentage #meals #three #nutrients
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The pie
chart
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 represents data regarding what percentage of daily intake of
the
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various nutrients
such
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 as
Sodium
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, saturated fat, and added
sugar
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 is consumed by US people in their meals.
Overall
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, it's visible that the major intake of
sodium
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 and saturated fat is in the dinner.
Whereas
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,
sugar
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 is mainly consumed in
snacks
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.
Additionally
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, all the nutrients are consumed for at least fourteen
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percent
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. In the first
chart
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, people consume more
sodium
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 in their evening meals which is about 43%.
Then
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,
daily
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 intake of
the
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sodium
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 is exactly same for the
snacks
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 and breakfast.
Besides
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 about 29
percent
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 of
sodium
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 is consumed through
lunch
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. In the second
chart
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, saturated fat is consumed highly in dinner with about 37
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percent
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whereas
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, lowest in the morning meal with about 16
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percent
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.
Besides
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, fat taken through
snacks
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 is 5
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percent
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 less than that taken through
lunch
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. So, the fat taken through
lunch
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 accounts for 26
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percent
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.
Therefore
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, there is a 3 per cent decrease in fat taken in
lunch
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 as compared to
sodium
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 taken in
lunch
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. Now, the third
chart
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 shows the amount of added
sugar
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 consumed. About 42
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percent
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 of
sugar
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 is consumed in
snacks
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, which is the highest.
However
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, the least
sugar
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 is consumed in the breakfast.
Lastly
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, the
sugar
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 consumed through the dinner is more than what is taken in the
lunch
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "besides, whereas".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, sodium, sugar, snacks, percent, lunch with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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