The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purpose in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purpose in six areas of the world.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.
These six pie charts demonstrate using of
water
in six different
part
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parts
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of the world (North
America
, South
America
, Europe, Africa, Central
Asia
, and South East
Asia
) for the variety of the aims in percents. At first sight, we can see that there are two main
purpose
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purposes
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of
water
using
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use
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- Agricultural and Industrial. These 6 areas can be divided into two main groups - one of them with significant
Agriculture
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agricultural use
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Use
(Africa, Central
Asia
, South East
Asia
, and South
America
), and the second one (North
America
and Europe) with
the
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essencial
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essential
Industrial
Use
.
Firstly
, the group with prevailing Agricultural
Use
. In the first
place
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place,
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there is Central
Asia
with the
larges
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largest
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amount of
water
(88%) for farming and the smallest quantity (only 5%) for
manufacture
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manufacturing
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.
Then
we have
an
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Africa and South East
Asia
with 84% and 81% of agricultural aims, and 7% and 12% of Industrial
use
respectively. On the
last
place in
this
group is
the
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South
America
with 71% and 10%
accordingly
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respectively
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.
Moreover
,
this
continent is in the first place (with 19%) between all 6 areas in the Domestic
Use
.
Further
, the second group
is characterise
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is characterised
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by
highly
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high
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Industrial
Use
- 48% in
the
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North
America
and 53% in Europe, and the rapid fall
of
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in
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the
using
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use of
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water
for farming - 39% and 32% respectively. In conclusion, it looks very clearly
in
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at
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which part of the world there are mostly industrial or mostly agricultural countries
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america, asia, use with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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