Planting trees is very important. Some people say that trees should be planted in the vacant areas of cities and towns, while others say that housing facilities should be built instead. Do you agree or disagree?
Plating
Correct your spelling
Planting
trees
and housing facilities
both are vital for the human race to survive. Trees
provide oxygen a basic need for humans, whereas
, housing facilities
give personal space to reduce stress. If I had to pick among these I would pick trees
however
, on the brighter side we can take them side to side.
Trees
being living species needs
an environment where Correct subject-verb agreement
need
it
can grow with Correct pronoun usage
they
suffiecient
sunlight and water. In order to receive Correct your spelling
sufficient
oxygen
they need to Add an article
the oxygen
planted
close to Add a missing verb
be planted
the
human living which will increase Correct article usage
apply
human's
health and Change noun form
human
overall
air ultimately improving the environment. Many people who go to a seluded
land for fresh air would save their precious time and money if Correct your spelling
secluded
trees
were planted near living spaces
. Overall
it would result in a healthier society. Less trees
would result in less oxygen which in turn would cause major problems for our race to survive in the long run.
Whereas
,
housing Remove the comma
apply
facilities
are equally as important as trees
if not less however
, they Add the comma(s)
, however
also
demand vacant spaces
but
Correct word choice
apply
due to
the advancement in technology we can built
compact houses and Change the verb form
build
instead
of an individual house, a residencial
tower with apartments will save areas for Correct your spelling
residential
trees
. We can also
build ecological
friendly houses which will help us maintain Change the word
ecologically
balance
between housing Add an article
a balance
the balance
facilities
and trees
, though, people do not prefer having trees
in their house
Fix the agreement mistake
houses
due to
the insects and wild life
they attract.
in conclusion, I think it is more important for us to plant Correct your spelling
wildlife
trees
in the
empty Correct article usage
apply
spaces
since we have found more efficient ways to build houses. they now require us
less Correct pronoun usage
apply
spaces
and can be built in a more compact manner.Fix the agreement mistake
space
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Grammar
Revise punctuation to improve clarity and readability. Ensure that commas and periods are correctly placed. For example, 'Trees provide oxygen a basic need for humans, whereas, housing facilities give personal space to reduce stress.' could be clearer with better punctuation.
Vocabulary
Enhance vocabulary use by incorporating more nuanced language and a wider range of vocabulary. For instance, instead of 'Trees being living species needs an environment where it can grow with suffiecient sunlight and water,' you could say, 'Trees, as living organisms, require an environment with adequate sunlight and water to thrive.'
Grammar
Work on the consistency of verb tenses throughout the essay. For instance, ensure that tenses are consistent within paragraphs to maintain coherence.
Task Achievement
The essay effectively outlines both views by discussing the importance of trees and housing facilities in urban areas.
Coherence and Cohesion
The main points are supported with logical explanations about the benefits of trees and how modern housing solutions can free up space.
Conclusion
The conclusion clearly summarizes the writer’s stance, reinforcing the argument presented in the body paragraphs.
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