the diagram shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane

the diagram shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane
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The diagram shows the
process
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by which the
sugar
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is produced from
sugar
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cane, comprising 7 distinct stages.
Overall
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, the
process
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starts with growing the
sugar
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cane and ends when the
sugar
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is ready for sale.
This
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includes growing, harvesting, crushing, purification, evaporation, centrifugation and
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last
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lastly
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, drying and cooling. To commence with,
first,
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sugar
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cane is farmed and
nurished
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nourished
for about 12 to 18 months, which is the longest period in the whole
process
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.
Second,
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the sugarcane is harvested by means of two ways, either manually or using vehicles
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as tractors.
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The harvested
sugar
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is put in a machine for crushing and a liquid that comes out is called
juice
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. The fourth step involves purifying the
juice
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using an equipment called a limestone filter.
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, the purified
juice
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is put on a high flame in an evaporator, and
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, through the evaporation
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juice
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is converted to syrup. Sixth, using a centrifuge, a circular tool,
sugar
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crystals are separated from the
sugar
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. Once that
happened
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, the
sugar
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is taken into the
last
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phase of drying and cooling, which
finalise
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finalises
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the
process
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and
produce
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produces
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sugar
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ready for sale.
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