the diagram shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane
The diagram shows the
process
by which the sugar
is produced from sugar
cane, comprising 7 distinct stages.
Overall
, the process
starts with growing the sugar
cane and ends when the sugar
is ready for sale. This
includes growing, harvesting, crushing, purification, evaporation, centrifugation and last
, drying and cooling.
To commence with, Change the word
lastly
first,
sugar
cane is farmed and nurished
for about 12 to 18 months, which is the longest period in the whole Correct your spelling
nourished
process
. Second,
the sugarcane is harvested by means of two ways, either manually or using vehicles such
as tractors. Third,
The harvested sugar
is put in a machine for crushing and a liquid that comes out is called juice
. The fourth step involves purifying the juice
using an equipment called a limestone filter.
Subsequently
, the purified juice
is put on a high flame in an evaporator, and thus
, through the evaporation process
juice
is converted to syrup. Sixth, using a centrifuge, a circular tool, sugar
crystals are separated from the sugar
. Once that happened
, the Wrong verb form
happens
sugar
is taken into the last
phase of drying and cooling, which finalise
the Correct subject-verb agreement
finalises
process
and produce
Correct subject-verb agreement
produces
sugar
ready for sale.Submitted by simrangupta98115 on
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