Some people think foreign visitors should be charged more than local person when they visit the cultural and historical attractions in a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Every
countries
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country
have
cultural and historical attractions that need to be preserved and Correct subject-verb agreement
has
is
one of the significant Correct subject-verb agreement
are
source
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sources
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of incomes
incomes
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income
to
the local economy.Change preposition
for
Therefore
, I totally agree with the statement above whereas
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that
the
foreign visitors should be charged more than local people which I will explain in the following paragraph.
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To begin
with, there is no doubt that it is important for the government and the public to keep national sites protected and clean because with
the right ways of doing it will Change preposition
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last
longer for the
future generations to experience it. Correct article usage
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For instance
, maintenance fees are expensive that
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and
required
expert cleaners and professional security guards to do their Wrong verb form
require
works
. Fix the agreement mistake
work
As a result
, with
the extra charges from the tourists can help ease the process. Change preposition
apply
Additionally
, this
activity enhances the revenue allocation toward community development projects that give benefits to local residents.
On the other hand
, some might argues
regardless unfairness of the Change the verb form
argue
entering
fees among tourists and Replace the word
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the
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local
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locals
while
visiting the
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.
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are.
This
can leads
to potential negative impacts on tourism. Change the verb form
lead
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Similarly
this
action might damaging
the country's reputation on the Change the verb form
damage
be damaging
globe
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global
stages
. Fix the agreement mistake
stage
For example
, encourage
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encouraging
price
for Fix the agreement mistake
prices
the
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foreigns
can boost and foster cultural exchange rather thanCorrect your spelling
foreign
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in contrast
.
In conclusion, despite all the drawbacks while
considering the vital parts of keeping the
good care Correct article usage
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on
the structure of cultural and historical attractions. Change preposition
of
Thus
, making a profit to the local economy means silver
lining between the unfairness. In my part of Correct article usage
a silver
view
, I agree Add an article
the view
a view
with
that Change preposition
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the
foreign visitors should pay more compared to local visitors.Correct article usage
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