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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two maps illustrate before and after the development of
island
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the island
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 by adding
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a varity
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varity
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variety
facilities
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of facilities
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 in
specific
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a specific
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 period.
overall
, it can be noted that the developed island
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is devided
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devided
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divided
 into three parts:
serveces
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services
, activities and
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a nutural
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nutural
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natural
 place to offer
for
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apply
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visitors what they may need.
It is clear that
 the right side
from
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of
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 the island remained
naturally
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natural
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 without any change to allow tourists
enjoying in
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to enjoy
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 the area
with
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while
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 sitting in the grass under the tree.
In addition
,
footpath
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the footpath
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in
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on
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 the left around the beach place did not have any mend just
give
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to give
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 people the chance to swim
near
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nearby
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. It is apparent that there are
alot
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a lot
 of new facilities, these offer
an
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apply
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interesting activities for the people who come to the place.
Also
,
a necessary buildings
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necessary buildings
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 which can service them as reception and restaurant in the north and south respectively.
Furthermore
, adding some accommodations
in
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 the left and right side of serving buildings.
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