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The pie charts show the reasons people in Great Britain had for visiting art museums in the years 1990 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the reasons people in Great Britain had for visiting art museums in the years 1990 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
pia
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pie
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 charts describe the purposes people in Great Britain had for visiting art
musuems
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museums
 in the years 1990 and 2000. 
Overall
, it is
vivid
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clear
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 from the chart that, to learn and gain knowledge were the most
while
 others were the least reasons over the given period. In
compraison
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comparison
 to fill their travel schedules was 27% in 1990 later jumped down 12% in 2000. But to buy art unpopular
throught out
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throughout
 the period of time. It is
also
 noticed from the charts that, to attend a special exhibit was going up.
To spend
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 time
friends
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with friends
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 and family was going up from 12% to 17% it was still lower than
to attend
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attending
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 a special
exhibit
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exhibition
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 in 2000.
In addition
, to learn and gain knowledge were more than between 1990 and 2000 to fill schedule was in 2000 in
UK
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the UK
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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