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Writing Samples
Band 4

Modern communications mean that it’s no longer necessary to write letters. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Nowadays, we are living in a modern time where the different ways of
communication
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communicating
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between
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with
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 each other have changed. The point of
this
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 essay is to discuss about if the write letters
are
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is
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 not
any more essentials
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essential
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 in our lives.
For
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 the one hand, some people,
above all
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 from the
old
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older
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 generation, believe in the antique methods
to
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of
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communicate
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, because they are not familiarised with the technology of
this
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 actual moment where we are.
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, when they remember their past, they do it fondly. Not only
due to
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 they
used to
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write cards as
pretty
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 personal way to express their thoughts and feelings, but
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also
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they also
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 it was hand-made
,
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 because they used their own hands and personal
letter
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letters
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.
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, they were
awaiting
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 for a long time with enthusiasm the answer from the other person as a gift.
By
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 the other hand, the new generation does not believe in
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 method
to
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express
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expression
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, and they prefer not to wait
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due
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because
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 to are
use
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 to
get
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 everything faster. The advantage of
this
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,
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 is that the information gets on time.
However
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, the message loses intimate value. We usually utilize other mediums,
such
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an
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email or mobile phone.
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, if I am about to gift something special, I prefer to write a message with my hands
in
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a
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paper. In conclusion, we should
to
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keep all
new
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the new
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 advantages
from
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the
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technology in our times, trying
not
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not to
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 forget the old methods, because they were charged with
wealth
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a wealth
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 of positive aspects.
That is
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 why, in my opinion, I do not support that
write
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 letters
are
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 not
neccesary
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necessary
 currently, both are really
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essential
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.

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structure
Ensure that each paragraph contains a single main idea to improve clarity. In some places, ideas could be more clearly separated for better readability.
grammar
Pay attention to verb tenses and subject-verb agreement. For example, 'write letters are' should be 'writing letters is' and 'due to are use to get' should be 'due to being used to getting'.
conciseness
Some sentences could be simplified for clearer communication. For instance, 'we should to keep all new advantages' should be 'we should keep all the new advantages'.
examples
Continue to widely use examples from personal experience, as this strengthens your arguments. However, ensure that these are clearly connected to your main points.
completeness
You have effectively presented both sides of the argument, which shows a balanced approach.
clarity
The topic is clearly understood, and your main argument is articulated well, particularly in the introduction and conclusion.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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