The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in the are of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts shows how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in the are of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts shows how it was distributed.
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The table gives information about various sources of police budgets in two years (2017 and 2018). The pie graphs illustrate the distribution of the collected money. A unit is measured in millions of pounds.
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, it can be seen that the general trend in the table remained the same for two years,
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the way how money was spent has seen
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in salaries for staff and an increase in technological advancements. The larger proportion of the police budget came from the national government, making up 175.5 in 2017 and 177.8 in 2018.
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trend was followed by local taxes and other sources in 2018. The total number demonstrated an upward trend from 304.7 to 318.6. The proportion of money spent on earnings for workers was three-quarters of the total budget at the beginning of the given period,
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value significantly fell to 69% after the following year.
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, the number of technological devices bought in 2017 went up by 6 per cent in 2018. Regarding other fields, the percentage of finances wasted on buildings and transport stood at the same level.
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