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Band 4.5

You should spend 40 minutes on this task. In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is widely argued that reading
newspaper
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newspapers
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 or
books
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 will be out of fashion in the future because
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internet
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the internet
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 has every piece of
information
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 available without paying
it
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for it
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. In my view,
i
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I
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 believe that online resource has more benefits than printed materials because
it
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they
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 can
be
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be accessed
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access
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 by everyone and fast mode of delivering
information
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 which
happen
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has happened
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 recently
To begin
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 with, the benefit of reading
article's
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articles
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 or magazines will be more reliable and easy to
access
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 than printed copies.
This
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 is because
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internet
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the internet
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 can
be
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be accessed
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access
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 by every
individuals
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individual
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 with basic knowledge and practical skills. since most of the
information
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 available online can be read without paying money,
thus
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 it is easier for
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a human
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human
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humans
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 to indulge themselves and get
the
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apply
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relevent
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relevant
information
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 with just one click
For instance
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,
according to
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report
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a report
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 from new times
india
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India
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, more
60
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than 60
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percent
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per cent
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 of young individuals
rely
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in rely
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 on
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internet
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due to
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 easy
access
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 to data and figures which ultimately reduces the dependency on
books
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 novels and newspaper.
while
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 it is true to say that printed
books
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 and newspapers have data collected which is observed by
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the author
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author
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authors
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 themselves, it is common for individuals to pick out those percentages and percentile with just
few
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a few
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 clicks
On the other hand
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, another advantage of using online
medium
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mediums
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 for reading is the faster pace of publishing and delivering
news
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 and stories around the globe. A key point to notice is that
these relevent
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this relevent information
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information
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 cannot be published suddenly without the use of
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the internet
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internet
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 as online is
worldwide
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a worldwide
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 source of delivering
news
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 and important updates,
as a result
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, printed papers are not that
much
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apply
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fast enough to transfer
news
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 from one place to another. To cite an example, most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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third-world countries
are
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still rely on printed materials due
limited
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to limited
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advance
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advanced
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 resources.
Thus
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, they are enable to get the most recent
news
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 and stories.
to conclude
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, even though reading habits of newspapers and
books
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 are not considered as important
souce
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source
 of getting
information
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 in future ahead, online materials are gaining recognition
due to
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 faster pace of
access
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 and easy mode of publishing or delivering
information
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 around the globe which can only be possible if
internet
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 cables are provided by the authority
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grammar
Work on your sentence structure and grammar. Ensuring that each sentence is well-structured will help your ideas come through more clearly.
coherence cohesion
Try to link your ideas more smoothly. Using transition words and phrases will make your essay easier to follow and more cohesive.
task achievement
While you have included relevant examples, try to integrate them more fluidly into your arguments.
task achievement
You provided a strong argument in favor of online resources being more accessible compared to printed materials.
introduction conclusion present
Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
coherence cohesion
You presented a balanced view while emphasizing your stance, which makes your argument more compelling.
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