The bar and line chart below shows average monthly temperatures and bathing suit sales in New York for the first 6 months of 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The bar and line chart below shows average monthly temperatures and bathing suit sales in New York for the first 6 months of 2012.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The chart here illustrates the average temperatures of New York
in contrast
to the revenue generated by the selling of bathing
suit
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suits
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in the span of six
months
, from January to June, in the year of 2012. The average
temparature
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temperature
was calculated in
fahrenheit
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Fahrenheit
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and the
sale
of the bathing suite in hundred
thousands
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thousand
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US
dollars
. To summarise, the
temperature
shows an upward trend,
while
the bathing suit
sale
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sales
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increased in
first
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the first
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four consecutive
months
, followed by a sharp declining trend in the
last
two
months
. The
temperature
of the January month was just above 30
degree
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degrees
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fahrenheit
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Fahrenheit
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, at that time the money earned by selling the suits was at 1 million
dollars
. In the following month, the
temperature
dropped very slightly ,
however
, the
sale
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sales
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increased
around
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to around
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25 hundred thousand
dollars
.
At
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In
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March, the
sale
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sales
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hit the 1.5 million mark, when the
temperature
spiked to almost 40
degree
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degrees
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fahrenheit
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Fahrenheit
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.
However
, the biggest
half yearly
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sale
was during April, at almost 3 million
dollars
, when the
temperature
was around 50
degree
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degrees
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fahrenheit
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Fahrenheit
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. The
temperature
kept rising in the following two
months
. But the
sale
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sales
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dropped below in May, below 1 mil
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words months, fahrenheit, sale, dollars, temperature with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly temperatures
  • bathing suit sales
  • correlation
  • monthly breakdown
  • significant changes
  • warmest months
  • speculate
  • trends
  • increase in temperature
  • contrasting
  • predictive speculation
  • general trends
  • specific months
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