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The graph below shows the average trip length (in miles) among U.S. children aged 5 to 15 years old. Sunrise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons were relevant.

The graph below shows the average trip length (in miles) among U.S. children aged 5 to 15 years old. Sunrise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons were relevant.
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The provided line graph illustrates the
quantity
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 of
miles
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traveled
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travelled
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 by different kinds of transport per every kid in the USA, whose age is in the range from 5 to 15 years, in half a century from 1970 until 2020. There are six ways of tripping
such
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 as walking,cycling,
bus
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, car, train and taxi. On the graph, using the
bus
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 is the most popular way of getting to the target place,
while
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 walking and
offering
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taking
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 a taxi
is
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 least common among these types. Over five decades, most modes showed an upward trend in distance
traveled
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travelled
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 except for two: walking and cycling.
Firstly
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, the 50 years saw a constant rise in
miles
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 per child using the
bus
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, from under 29 to 39
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 During the same period, car
usage
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 reached a peak at the beginning of the millennium, rising from 20 to 31
miles
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, though it slightly fell to 29 in 2020.
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, cycling, which stood at the same
miles
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 as
bus
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usage
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 in 1970, decreased at the same rate as
bus
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usage
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 increased, leading to 19
miles
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 in 2020.
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, walking reflected car
usage
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 trends, collapsing to 11
miles
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 after an initial rise from 16 to 5
miles
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 at the start of the century, followed by a rise to 7
miles
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 in 2020. Train
usage
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 stood at 17
miles
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 in 1970,
then
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 fluctuated between 19 and 21
miles
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,
finally
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 remaining at 31
miles
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at the end
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.
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 Taxi
usage
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 increased from 5 to 15
miles
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 in 1990 and, in the next two decades, mirrored the previous two decades by returning to 5
miles
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,
then
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 sharply rising to 20
miles
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 per child.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words miles, bus, usage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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