The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. Write at least 150 words. You may spend 20 minutes to complete the task

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The chart illustrates a comparison between

France

and the

in the consumption of some products during 2010.

Overall

France

seems to demand more than the

for cars, books and cameras, but for computers and perfumes the

took the lead. On the one hand, both the

and

France

depend on cars as both of them showed high results, but still,

France

is higher by nearly 50K.

Furthermore

France

presents big differences when it comes to books and cameras with a gap of about 100k and 200k , respectively, making

France

in the lead most of the time.

On the other hand

, the

changed the equation in both computers and perfumes, but still, these differences are negligible which are 25k and 50k , respectively, when we compare it with the differences in other products.

To sum up

, despite the

's consumption i computers and perfumes, it has been noticed that

France

consumes more than the

in most of its products.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words france, uk, k with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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4 paragraphs

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Single idea per paragraph

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Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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