The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. You may spend 20 minutes to complete the task

The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.  You may spend 20 minutes to complete the task
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The chart illustrates a comparison between
France
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and the
UK
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in the consumption of some products during 2010.
Overall
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,
France
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seems to demand more than the
UK
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for cars, books and cameras, but for computers and perfumes the
UK
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took the lead. On the one hand, both the
UK
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and
France
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depend on cars as both of them showed high results, but still,
France
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is higher by nearly 50K.
Furthermore
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,
France
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presents big differences when it comes to books and cameras with a gap of about 100k and 200k , respectively, making
France
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in the lead most of the time.
On the other hand
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, the
UK
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changed the equation in both computers and perfumes, but still, these differences are negligible which are 25k and 50k , respectively, when we compare it with the differences in other products.
To sum up
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, despite the
UK
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's consumption i computers and perfumes, it has been noticed that
France
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consumes more than the
UK
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in most of its products.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words france, uk, k with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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