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The bar chart below shows average UK salaries, by city. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows average UK salaries, by city. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the mean of
remunarations
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remunerations
remuneration
 in seven different cities from England and Scotland of The United Kingdom,
categorizing
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according to
it's
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their
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population
. The money is calculated in
pounds
. The city of London has the highest number of residents, at 50951 and their average
salary
 is 33,634
pounds
, which
put
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puts
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 it
in
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at
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 the top in average income. Cambridge is in the second position in that category as
it's
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its
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avarage remunaration
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average remuneration
 is just above 29
thousands
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thousand
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pounds
,
while
 its
population
 is the lowest being just below 2200. Bristol ranks third in the
salary
 bracket with around 27
thousands
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thousand
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pounds
salary
 with
the
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a
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population
 of 3111.
Similarly
, Edinburgh is just below Bristol with only
few
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a few
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hundreds
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hundred
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pounds
 less.
However
, the lowest earning city is the Birmingham and ma with only around 25
thousands
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thousand
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of
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apply
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pounds
. To summarise, the
higest
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highest
 median
salary
 is in London, which is
also
 the most populated city.
On the other hand
, the average
salary
 of the people of Birmingham is the lowest and in
term
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terms
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 of
population
, Cambridge takes that place.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, pounds, salary with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
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