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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The table depicts the way UK joblessness used their time
last
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 year.
Overall
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, it can be seen that women tend to do some outdoor activities
whereas
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 man more keen on several indoor exercises in the
afternoon
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 during their free period.
To begin
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 with, the majority of females' time is allocated to doing activities in the morning
such
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 as house chores, which is 49 per
cent
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 and 21 per
cent
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 in cocktail hour, more than double that of men. In line with
this
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 other enterprises like shopping, and visiting town were likely to be done in the morning
while
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 visiting friends and relatives was more frequent in the
afternoon
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.
Conversely
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, ladies and boys showed similar moment rates in activities
such
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 as staying in bed, counted 8 per
cent
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 in the morning, and 1 per
cent
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 in the
afternoon
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, where women did not do
this
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.
On the other hand
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, gentlemen allocated 22 per
cent
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 and 13 per
cent
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 in the morning and
afternoon
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 respectively for hunting jobs, which was slightly higher than ledies.
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, approximately 13 per
cent
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 of males’ hours were used for gardening, far higher than females who just spent 3 per
cent
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 in both stages.
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, men spent more time sitting around and TV in the
afternoon
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 which was 9 and 14 per
cent
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 respectively, treble higher than in the morning.
In addition
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, decorating and drinking seem quite similar percentages at two different times.
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