In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?
Owning a
home
or renting a home
sometimes can be a serious problem in many families. However
, there is a common view on housing issue
in some countries that owning a Fix the agreement mistake
issues
home
is way better than renting one
. This
essay aim
to explore the reason why so many Change the verb form
aims
people
consider owing
a Correct your spelling
owning
house
as such
a big deal.
There several
reasons why having Add a missing verb
are several
an
own Change the word
your
house
property looks so important. Firstly
, owing
a Correct your spelling
owning
home
represent
a sense of belonging, which means it will be more comfortable and free to stay in a property that Correct subject-verb agreement
represents
all
to yourself. And Add a missing verb
is all
compare
to Wrong verb form
Compared
this
sense of freedom, living in a rented house
may have a lot of restrictions, such
as changing the decorations, moving furniture and having pets. In this
circumstance, it will be hard for people
to feel the place like home
. Another reason is that owing
a Correct your spelling
owning
home
is more stable than renting one
. In China, most of
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apply
people
consider a big deal about having a family and a stable life, especially the old
generations among the Fix the agreement mistake
older
family
. And Fix the agreement mistake
families
owing
a Correct your spelling
owning
house
takes a big part of these two goals, because it's steadier and the family don't have to worry about moving around.
To define whether it is a positive or negative situation, I think it depends on the stage of one'
life. For Change noun form
one's
the
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apply
middle-age
and old Correct your spelling
middle-aged
people
and also
the
young parents who have kids, it is wonderful to Correct article usage
apply
owe
a Verb problem
have
home
. In that case, old people
and kids can have a stable relationship with their community, we all know that
is't
painful for kids to transfer to another school and for old Correct your spelling
isn't
people
to saying
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say
good bye
to their old Correct your spelling
goodbye
friend
. Fix the agreement mistake
friends
However
, for the
young Correct article usage
apply
people
, having a house
may not be such
appealing. For most
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Most
of
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apply
the
young Correct article usage
apply
people
can't afford a house
by
their deposit, so if they need to buy Change preposition
with
one
, they have to ask for loans. And many of
young Change preposition
apply
people
are no
willing to have Correct your spelling
not
such
a huge burden at a such
young age, so renting a house
might be a better choice for them.
In conclusion, owing
a Correct your spelling
owning
home
is a sense of belonging, but it should not become a burden. No matter which way you live, the most important point is to choose according to
your own situation.Submitted by fiasngs on
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task achievement
Try to ensure that your ideas and points are fully developed in each paragraph. For example, explore more reasons and consequences for owning or renting a home.
coherence cohesion
Work on the logical structure of your essay. Some points seem to be repetitive or can be better organized. Ensure a smooth flow between your paragraphs and main points.
task achievement
You have presented a complete response to the task and addressed both the reasons for preferring home ownership and your viewpoint on whether it is positive or negative.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, making it easy for the reader to follow your argument.
Your opinion
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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
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