All over the world, societies are facing a growing problem with obesity. This problem affects oth children and adults. What are the reasons and solutions?

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These days, charity has been
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issues
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in every nation. and it affects both
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and
youngsters
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. food habits and lifestyle are the main causes
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trend. There are some feasible
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problem.
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essay discusses it briefly for the following reasons. There are two major reasons for increasing the
obesity
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issues
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. One of the key causes is that
children
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and
adults
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both
are only prefer
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to eat junk
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and soft drinks rather than healthy
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,
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, these both persons are the main victims of the
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, fast
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cost is lower than healthy
meals
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, so numerous
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are prefer
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to buy
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foods
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from
Mcdonalts
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McDonalds
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burger price is $2. Another reason is that people's lifestyle
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nowadays, a lack of physical
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and
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a sedentary
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lifestyle leads to
obesity
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issues
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among
youngsters
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and toddlers. To be more precise,
children
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always play video games
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of playing outside, there are the cared
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increasing
obesity
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. Despite these, there are some feasible
solutions
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to be solved. One of the practical remedies is that
parents
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should cook at their home rather than buying junk
foods
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;
parents
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once start to cook
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eat
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healthy
meals
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, and
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, toddlers automatically will eat and they stay far away from weight
gaining
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issues
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.
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, Indian
parents
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usually cook at their home and their infants
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practice
to eat
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eating
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healthy
foods
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only, that's why India has
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level of
obesity
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issues
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. Another remedy is that
adults
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should
carry
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physical
exercise
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in
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every day because they are sitting
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for long
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hours at their office so they have neither free time to do
exercise
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nor interest because of tiredness but it leads to
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troubles among
youngsters
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. The authority should conduct
body builders
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bodybuilders
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competition
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competitions
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for
adults
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to maintain their health very fit. There are
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apply
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solutions
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for
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phenomenon. In conclusion,
weight
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the weight
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gaining
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problem is
growing
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serious issue, and
children
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and
youngsters
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are the
victim
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of
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. Eating
Lenhealthy
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Healthy
foodstuffs
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a lack of physical
exercise
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are the major reasons for
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trend;
parents
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stimulate to their prefer to eat only healthy
meals
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than pocket
meals
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as well as
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the ministry should conduct body builders competitions for
adults
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in order to create awareness, are the
solutions
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for
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phenomenon.

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task achievement
Although your essay addresses the topic, ensure that your introduction clearly states the problem (obesity) being discussed. Avoid using 'charity' in this context.
task achievement
Work on developing clearer and more comprehensive ideas. Ensure you provide fully elaborated points supported by precise examples.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow of your essay. Use connectors and transitional phrases to link your ideas more smoothly.
coherence cohesion
Pay attention to sentence structure to avoid run-on sentences, and make sure your ideas are expressed concisely.
coherence cohesion
Your essay includes an introduction and a conclusion, which helps in structuring your response.
task achievement
You have addressed both causes and solutions, which demonstrates an understanding of the task requirements.
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Using examples from real life, like the McDonald's example, helps to support your points and make them more relatable.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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