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The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 report derives from the listed line graph which enumerates the information on the survey's outcome for the causes of why individuals hit the road from their home town to the capital
city
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 of a particular country. The unit of measurement is the number of
people
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. A glance at the chart reveals that a tremendous quantity of mankind move to the capital
city
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 to find a brand-new occupation and study
whereas
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 fewer amount of
people
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 prefer to move to the
city
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 capital to meet new friends or visit family and some
also
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 find it adventurous.
To begin
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 with, the drift of
people
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 who leave their nest for new job encountered a decent upsurge from slightly more than 60000 in 2000 to almost the ceiling of 90000
at the end
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 of the listed timeline. As regards the study's purpose for moving, it witnessed a much more remarkable acceleration rather than the previous trend, resulting in 25000 at the very beginning of 2000 to approximately a peak of 90000 in 2015, coinciding with the previous employment purpose.
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, moderately more than 10000
people
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 decided to go to a
city
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 capital owing to visiting their friends or family in 2000,
however
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, the situation altered to about 23000
people
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 for the 15 years. What's more, a trip to the capital
city
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 for fun became another purpose of moving to it has experienced steady growth for 15 years, commencing from modestly more than 10000
people
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 to a solid 15000 in 2015.
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Vocabulary: The word "move" was used 2 times.
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