The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
The pie
chart
illustrates the location of dance Use synonyms
classes
that young people undertake in an Australian town, Use synonyms
whereas
the bar Linking Words
chart
demonstrates the types of them.
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Overall
, it is evident that Linking Words
while
people aged below 11 are most keen on ballet and tap dances, those from Linking Words
11
-16 age bracket show a significant interest Correct article usage
the 11
for
modern ones. Notably, the majority of these Change preposition
in
classes
take place in private studios.
Looking at the pie Use synonyms
chart
in detail, it is noticeable that almost half of the dance Use synonyms
classes
take place in private studios, making it the most popular location. School halls follow, contributing to almost a third of the Use synonyms
classes
. In comparison, community halls and other, and colledge-based studios, account for the lowest proportions at nearly 20% and 10% of the figure respectively.
Moving on to the bar Use synonyms
chart
, the youngest age bracket has a substantial tendency towards ballet, with roughly 600 of them attending. Use synonyms
However
, only 300 of them took part in modern dances, Linking Words
while
the figure for 11-to 16-year-olds is well above 500 students. Linking Words
Lastly
, tap dances are of high popularity among below-11s with more than 400 students, compared to the older age group's 400.Linking Words
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