The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
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The pie
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illustrates the location of dance
classes
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that young people undertake in an Australian town,
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the bar
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demonstrates the types of them.
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, it is evident that
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people aged below 11 are most keen on ballet and tap dances, those from
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-16 age bracket show a significant interest
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modern ones. Notably, the majority of these
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take place in private studios. Looking at the pie
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in detail, it is noticeable that almost half of the dance
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take place in private studios, making it the most popular location. School halls follow, contributing to almost a third of the
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. In comparison, community halls and other, and colledge-based studios, account for the lowest proportions at nearly 20% and 10% of the figure respectively. Moving on to the bar
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, the youngest age bracket has a substantial tendency towards ballet, with roughly 600 of them attending.
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, only 300 of them took part in modern dances,
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the figure for 11-to 16-year-olds is well above 500 students.
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, tap dances are of high popularity among below-11s with more than 400 students, compared to the older age group's 400.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • distribution
  • attendance
  • community centers
  • dance schools
  • private studios
  • ballet
  • hip-hop
  • contemporary
  • ballroom
  • analysis
  • popularity
  • accessibility
  • cost
  • cultural trends
  • media influences
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