Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion
Nowadays,
students
in universities have dilemma
about the educational system. Fix the agreement mistake
dilemmas
One
group of people convinced
that it is important to concentrate on the specialization that you Add a missing verb
is convinced
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however
another group thinks that it is Add a comma
however,
positive
activity to learn Correct article usage
a positive
another subjects
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another subject
other subjects
besides
the major one
. It is important to sort out the pros and cons of these opinions.
On the one
hand, learning the main subject is important to increase people's knowledge and to be more professional. Also
, students
do not interrupt themself from their specialization, besides
they have more possible time
for learning. Feeling confidence
in their profession is necessary to succeed. Replace the word
confident
For instance
, my father always pays attention to learn
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that is
dedicated to his profession, that's
why he is Correct word choice
and that's
successful
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a successful
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furthermore,
do
not like to waste his Change the verb form
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time
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result is that he has a lot of Correct word choice
and the
time
to immerse himself in the study of his topic.
On another hand, students
never know what will happen in the future, maybe topics that they have will not be necessary that is
why it is important to learn more than only one
subject. Also
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except
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besides
that
can be Correct pronoun usage
which
positive
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a positive
For example
, my sister always have
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interest
in learning new things, she Correct article usage
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Therefore
, this
way of learning can also
lead to the result
.
In conclusion, everyone can choose their own way of learning, the success becomes Fix the agreement mistake
results
personally
, it depends on how Change the word
personal
student
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the student
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working all the Wrong verb form
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. In my opinion, I would learn another subjects
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, the reason for that is
I want to study something new and various, I think that this
is positive to
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students
as well, it can lead them to the
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coherence cohesion
Improve the consistency of sentence structures and eliminate minor grammatical errors to enhance clarity and coherence.
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task achievement
The essay addresses both perspectives of the prompt and provides a clear opinion in the conclusion.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and gives a personal opinion, ending the essay well.
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