The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.
The graph shows the comparisons of the old and new
shops
from each year. It’s stated that the number of Use synonyms
shops
each year has been either terminated or still running, 2011 is the year that 9,000 Use synonyms
shops
have been reportedly closed every day, and Use synonyms
store
Use synonyms
owners
didn’t have the debt to keep their places running so the best way to deal with Use synonyms
this
situation is to close the shop.
In 2012, has Linking Words
also
had the same problem as Its Linking Words
shops
were declining a lot and no new Use synonyms
shops
were beginning to open, It’s not a good start for Use synonyms
store
Use synonyms
owners
to see their Use synonyms
stores
declining. Jump forward to 2018 new Use synonyms
stores
have recently opened and it’s getting better and better, Use synonyms
while
recent Linking Words
shops
have dropped significantly in recent days. From 2015 a lot of Use synonyms
stores
were in critical condition and 1000 Use synonyms
shops
were closed because of the recent debts Use synonyms
store
Use synonyms
owners
were struggling to pay. Use synonyms
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Furthermore
in 2016, many Add a comma
Furthermore,
shops
were dropped again, and now rarely other Use synonyms
shops
now are open because of the time there.
In conclusion, from 2011 to 2018 shop Use synonyms
owners
struggled to keep their Use synonyms
stores
running Use synonyms
while
some are likely able to do, Linking Words
hence
I think Linking Words
this
is a lot of issue for opening a shop because they have to make more money and bring ideas to attract more customers into their Linking Words
shops
and bring business. Use synonyms
Linking Words
However
it is unlikely that new Add a comma
However,
shops
are struggling to keep their finances, but Use synonyms
store
Use synonyms
owners
need to pay their debts to ensure their Use synonyms
shops
can keep going on well.Use synonyms
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Vocabulary: Replace the words shops, store, owners, stores with synonyms.
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