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Machine translation (MT) is slower and less accurate than human translation and there is no immediate or predictable likelihood of machines taking over this role from humans.

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-Today technology of
human
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 has developed by means of
machines
however
 the
machines
was
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 created by people because of that I do not agree with that and I will explain why I disagree
?
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 İn the dawn of civilization
the
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mankind did not have
machines
 , they had just simple gear. after that
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 industrial revolutions brought new somethings which
is
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;
machine
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. If we peer into the
machines
 we can see numerous benefits for producing and manufacturing .
Besides
the
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machine translation
are
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 gaining
fast
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 day by day and
they
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 will be more accurate in the future rather than today.
Such
 as today’s computer can calculate difficult figures or numbers or scan documents in
the
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 second. They play a critical role in human life.
On the other hand
 , these meanings not that human are outraced by
machines
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 translation. From my point of view ; in the year 2024 we still have super intelligent people
compare
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 to
machines
 .
For
example
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 several jobs need labour power
in addition
 to human work .
Although
 the
machines
 created
a lots
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 of new things like applicants , they do not have sufficient fasting
as well as
 ability. İn terms of overtaking people’s role , they might replace
to
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human
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humans
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 because artificial intelligence can create valuable things
therefore
 the MT can have much more transmitter fasting
with in
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within
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 the next centuries.
To conclude
 ; The most intelligent creature
of
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 the world is human , even ıf the
machines
 are supported by artificial , we are still unstoppable and we will
be continuing
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 to produce quality
machines
 .
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