In spite of technological developments in transportation, many people believe that a bicycle is the best way to reach in any destination. What are the advantages and disadvantages of using a bicycle nowadays?

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newly industrialized world, products are improved. Non-advanced machines

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driverless

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has advantages and disadvantages. In my view, the drawbacks are greater than the benefits. In

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essay, both pros and cons will be discussed in the following paragraphs. On the one hand, it has some positive points.

Initially

, when a vehicle is changed into the driverless it can provide some influence things.

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, by using

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system people only do their

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work.

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, employment people can do their office work.

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, it can reinforce their family and friendly relationships.

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, it's free time for drivers and can speak with their families or enjoy

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the road.

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role in The automotive industry .

On the other hand

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of accidents is one of the problems of driverless

cars

. To exemplify, in the rainy weather the sensors of

cars

are not working and it is very dangerous.

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, at the time of accidents, it is very hard for traffic police to Identify the culprit.

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, there is no doubt

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problem. In conclusion, on the basis of the points above, these days driverless

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problem of

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system is very huge rather than

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. So, from my perspective ,the demerits overpower the merits .

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